June 16, 2008 | Book Stuff, DA Series, Draven Atreides
So, we’re halfway thru Chapter One and I hope you’re enjoying the story. I have a question for you all:
What did you think of the blurb about the spa treatment at the beginning of the chapter? Has it added to the story? Do you think it’s irrelevant? Do you think I should remove it or leave it in?
Here’s why I ask. My original plan for the series was to add tidbits or interesting facts at the beginning of each chapter, depending on her case. Since this story is about a spa, I thought it would be interesting to insert the types of treatments that are offered at the Royalty Treatment Day Spa.
My editor told me to remove them, that they didn’t have any relevance to the story. When I explained why I was doing it (to be different, among other things), her response remained the same: take them out.
What say you?
just a girl says:
Hmmm. It is an interesting idea, I just don’t think it works in practice, it seems irrelevant, and when I first read it, I was confused. But maybe it works over more chapters, as we get into the story? I guess it depends how far in we find out the case is the spa.
x
JAG